So far vvery well written, But I do suggest using other terms. I saw "spider-man" alot leaving less of an impact on me. May i suggest using another term like "webbed hero" or "Masked Bandet (sp)" The word choices were weak in some points of the example. Maybe looking up some more powerful or less systematic words will do that trick! I know this will be a great fan fiction to read! I will admit writing stories about things you don't know much about can be hard- but I know you can do this!
Other then that i think its great!
I think it's the style of the prologue, Mathew Stover is an amazing author and I've decided to use that style a bit.
oh if its another authors style- then go for it- C:
Yep! I get that a lot when it comes to "I'm not a fan of this, but it's their style." Reason I used the full name Nick Furry so many times. Instead of something else.